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Thursday, June 3, 2010
我的朋友
我有一位朋友他的名子是顾轩玮。我在幼儿园第一次认识他。幼儿园有胖嘟嘟的兔子,绿油油的草。幼儿园蓝得像蓝蓝的天空似的。他讲话非常快像个机器似的。我们分开了最后在三年级又合起来了。现在我们已经五年级了,我们在学校90%的时候在一起。
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khoo xuan wei
June 3, 2010 at 8:02 PM
很好,但是你需要写多一点词语。
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Joshua Goh
June 3, 2010 at 8:18 PM
很好,但如果能写多一点就好了。
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何老师
June 7, 2010 at 8:36 PM
虽然比喻得不错,但没有条理;一会儿提轩玮,一会儿提幼儿园,太乱了!
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很好,但是你需要写多一点词语。
ReplyDelete很好,但如果能写多一点就好了。
ReplyDelete虽然比喻得不错,但没有条理;一会儿提轩玮,一会儿提幼儿园,太乱了!
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